Friday, 1 November 2013

Prompt Writing 2

One wonderful, shiny day people went to the beach because it was sunny. When they went it was warm and they played in the sand making sand castles.

When they were finished making sand castles they went in the water and went to get an ice cream. After that their parents were talking and they were horrified because their children were gone, so they we looking for them.

The children came back and came with an ice cream so their parents were happy because they came back.

They told the children that they needed to tell them first and when their parents say yes then they could go and when they say no then stay there.

1 comment:

  1. This is good Petra, but you need to make sure that your sentences are not to long. Remember to use full stops when you need to take a breath when you are proofreading your work.